What do you think of this poem?
540723
I think it is good because it is graphic, shows details that can be visualized and which belong to each other; the only jarring element is 'the innermost part of our souls' because there you have left your own pictures and, although not deliberately, used a cliché.\nYour poem is much better than the one that follows oin one of the answers - by far.
231805
the poem is very good!!!
980984
nice poem is it a haiku
755557
This poem, like many of Blake's works, is simple and childlike, but its meaning is profound.  In many of his poems he uses symbols, and we are left to interpret the meaning.  To me this poem is about empathy and sharing the grief of others.  In today's world people may think that God has forsaken us, but in our time of greatest need he is there beside us, sharing our grief and giving us the inner strength we will need to cope with it.   We need to look beyond what the mortal eyes can see and not be misled by our superficial perception of reality.   To Blake God is not an abstract idea, but a real entity\n\nPerhaps another poem, Footprints, is a good commentary on this one of William Blake's.\n\nIf you do a YA search for William Blake you will find more than 30 questions about him and his poetry.  You may find helpful information there.
781428
Wonderful poem.\nDont do what you suggest though it wont have the effect you will be hoping for. My suggestion is to talk to her and tell her you wrote this poem abuot her and recite it. Good luck
746531
Wow, that is so beautiful.\nNo, it does not sound like a letter, it's definately a poem and it has a story somewhere in there. I wouldn't mind hearing it, i'm interested. I've written a few poems but they're not constructed well like yours is very well done. mine all have stories burried somewhere in them. How i came to writting whatever i wrote or what they're about.\n\nbest of luck, and keep on rolling\n~just a Youngling\n\nps. i chocked on a paperclip because that's how i roll
802222
Honestly?  I think the poem is too gushy.  If you'd been dating for a while, it'd be great -- but from an anonymous person, the parts about "you're irreplaceable to me" and "my heart will never stop beating  . . ."  are a little creepy.\nI would change it to:\n\nWhen I think of the perfect girl,\nYou come instantly to mind\n\nWith the intellect of a genius,\nEyes that sparkle like gems,\nHair as soft as silk,\nAn angelic voice that sings beautiful melodies to my ears,\nCheeks as adorable and round,\nAnd a smile that lights up even the darkest room\nIt's obvious you are God's work of art\n\nYou're an amazing girl, an amazing person\nSo special to me\nAnd my heart beats gladly\nFor it lives off these feelings I have for you\n\nGood luck!
41410
This poem is really a good poem... Yes it is a good peom... The meaning is not deep but when you want a deeper meeanig then put the words into your life then you will understand the real meaning of the peom\n\nDesiderata \n\nGo placidly amid the noise and haste,\nand remember what peace there may be in silence.\nAs far as possible without surrender\nbe on good terms with all persons.\nSpeak your truth quietly and clearly;\nand listen to others,\neven the dull and the ignorant;\nthey too have their story. \n\nAvoid loud and aggressive persons,\nthey are vexations to the spirit.\nIf you compare yourself with others,\nyou may become vain and bitter;\nfor always there will be greater and lesser persons than yourself.\nEnjoy your achievements as well as your plans. \n\n\nKeep interested in your own career, however humble;\nit is a real possession in the changing fortunes of time.\nExercise caution in your business affairs;\nfor the world is full of trickery.\nBut let this not blind you to what virtue there is;\nmany persons strive for high ideals;\nand everywhere life is full of heroism. \n\n\nBe yourself.\nEspecially, do not feign affection.\nNeither be cynical about love;\nfor in the face of all aridity and disenchantment\nit is as perennial as the grass. \n\n\nTake kindly the counsel of the years,\ngracefully surrendering the things of youth.\nNurture strength of spirit to shield you in sudden misfortune.\nBut do not distress yourself with dark imaginings.\nMany fears are born of fatigue and loneliness.\nBeyond a wholesome discipline,\nbe gentle with yourself. \n\n\nYou are a child of the universe,\nno less than the trees and the stars;\nyou have a right to be here.\nAnd whether or not it is clear to you,\nno doubt the universe is unfolding as it should. \n\n\nTherefore be at peace with God,\nwhatever you conceive Him to be,\nand whatever your labors and aspirations,\nin the noisy confusion of life keep peace with your soul. \n\n\nWith all its sham, drudgery, and broken dreams,\nit is still a beautiful world.\nBe cheerful.\nStrive to be happy. \n\n\nMax Ehrmann, Desiderata, Copyright 1952
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ok summer here is the best i got:\n\nThis poem is (obviously) a lament, or some sorrow for something lost, also known as an elegy.  In this case, the poem is a woman's song.  She is lamenting the loss of her lover (it is possible that he is simply not there, or absent).  \nHowever, it appears as if "her lord" is the same lord that governs the people in this poem.  Therefore, for some reason they are isolating her from him.  Her lord himself tells her to take up a "dwelling" that he has apparently appointed for her.  \nOnce there, she meets a man and falls in love with him, claiming that "death alone" would separate them.\nFor the remainder of the poem, the woman is expressing her deep grief as she is in exile in what seems to be some type of cave or tunnell in the ground.\n\nhere is a paragraph by paragraph analysis:\n1.  \nHere she is introducing her lament as a sorrowful tale of her utmost woe; that never before has she experienced any distress as dire or excruciating as this.\n\n2.\nhere she explains that her lords family/ gentry sent him on a sea journey.  "Dawn-cares" can be interpreted as she either worries about him so much, she is losing sleep, or she wakes up in the morning, and her 1st thought is her husband.  [These compound words are famous in anglo-saxon poetry.]  She decides to go into exile, which was a custom of women to do who were w/o there husbands.  She may have disgraced him and is thencforth banishing herself.  It seems that she is turning to his people for advice, and they have their own plans as to where she should go.  The scheme and plot to send her away and put her in a position which will forever keep them apart. \n\n3.\nHer lord confirms the dwelling place she is to go to.  Where she went for exile, she knows few people.\n\n4.  \nShe falls in love with a man who is depressive and well taken care of.  He also seems to be in exile w/ a broken heart...he may even be suicidal.  They vow together, that, in their exile, they will have eachother.  But, he kills himself, destroying their pact.  she is back to where she stared in her sorrow.\n\n5.  \nFillied with longing, she is sent to live in a cave or some sort of underground hovel.  \n\n6. She describes her surroundings as dismal and "briar-choked".  She bemoans that fact that loves walk the earth and experience joy, while she is condemned to despair.  She explains that she can never gain composure because she used to be so full of hope, promise, and she was enthused for life.  Now that everything is taken from her, she is torn.  She takes a turn to curse her lord and wish upon him sorrow and grief, that he may become lost and wandering in his journeys.  She wished upon him a brooding heart and "breast cares" (broken heart). \n\nWell, I really hope this helps you!! Good luck with everything!  I will also email this to u so u get it.
1049444
its a beautiful poem\n10/10\nyou have a talent my darling\npursue it!\n\n\nStay Hungry, Stay Foolish
334020
I love it, I write poetry myself, you should keep going with it :) It is very deep , Good job
714422
that poem was so sweet im crying now\n\nu would be a great poet u have got a good talent :) xx
364199
Like a burning star lighting up the midnight sky.............\n\nWEll?? What do you think??  I write alot of poetry... So,, feel free to email me  TOMCAZZ65@YAHOO.COM  love to chat with you -)  Tom xoox
860190
I am not an 'expert' on poetry but then, who is? Poetry is a very personal thing. \nAs far as your poem goes, I think it is well formed and obviously well thought out. It seems to describe what a lot of people feel in this day and age, in that we can all take something from previous experiences and it is up to us whether that is positive or negative for us and the others involved. \nI am sure that someone else will see this poem completely differently from me but even if you get negative comments do not let that dissuade you from carrying on writing.
788956
I loved this one...It's a very sweet poem about showing someone a reason not to take their own life .... Truly,Heart warming!!!! And I should know..I'm a  published Poet...It shows warmth and tenderness....It also lets me see inside your heart.And I see a warm,loving person..\n~hugs~
282231
There is some attempt at rhyming, but it isn't very well executed.  The "musical" feeling isn't passed on to the reader through any form of pacing or timing in the poem.  For a young person I would have to say this is a good attempt, but for anyone 16 and older - try again.
1150421
I would have to know what this is from and who wrote it.  If it is the lyrics to some song, I would say don't let young children hear it.  If it is the poetry of someone older and more mature expressing pain of life, that's okay.  If this has been written by some teenager or young person who is suffering, I would worry.  Yes, it is beautiful and a true sign of amazing talent and use of imagery and words, but it could signify a cry for help.  Hope someone is listening.