a friend ask me to write a poem for his gf is it good?
538855
Did you mention in there you were 15?  Wow, pretty good.
1187911
You must be a professional writer, or if not, you certainly have a gift for it. Your phrases are very phylisophical, and deep. As a human, you're right though, we get to the point that nobody else can "hold a candle" to our one true love. Good terminloogies used.
538472
It's a pretty poem :D keep writting them, you are good.
715159
poetry is a gift I can appreciate, cant help you on the question though, God bless
807283
It's interesting, as a poem I would have stopped at struggle to change as a song its fine to continue, Some grammatical and punctuation errors, I would accept it as a work in progress. :-) good luck and keep writing
487166
im thinking if your thinking about taking a shot at being w/ her, I would go for it.. By her response and what you were saying in the poem, to me she is clearly giving a green light.. go for it .. good luck.. nice poem.. I might have to borrow that... lol
402566
whew! that's sweet! i think you should read the poem you wrote. the best thing you would read to our wife would be the one that came from your heart, from your feelings and love for her and..... that would be your own composition! \n\ncongratulations! wish you all the best!
183984
Since you wrote the love notes, I think it's best that you give them to her and let her read them. We all feel a certain inspiration when writing and sometimes there are things we feel we can express only through writing. Your first instinct was to write her not talk her.  So I believe you should stick to your original plan.  Unless of course you strongly feel otherwise.
407660
First if you know that you are in love with Jake, and u think he is in love with you, i feel that both should sit down and tell each other what is on you all minds. I should not hurt to much but if that does not work, then do what i did when i had the hardest time tell the person i care about how i feel, through poetry,  here is one that I wrote, you are welcome to use it.  BEST OF LUCK  \n\nA Beginning\nby Z-Baby\nWe've only just begun,\nand that’s the hardest part.\nSo careful not to end it,\nBefore it really starts.\n\nDiscovering how to make you smile,\nand subjects to avoid.\nCan be hard sometimes,\nfor life to be enjoyed.\n\nWe've shared so little time so far,\nbut all we've had been good.\nI've felt more the past few months,\nthat I thought I ever could.\n\nSo if you leave tomorrow, \nI’ll have but one regret.\nAnd that’s - that though I’ll\ncare for you,\nI'd wish the boundaries we had leapt.
422202
I had a friend once who wrote a story book about him and a girl he was interested in and gave it to her on Valentine's Day to tell her how he felt...  Very cute idea, I think, but only in the right situation.  Otherwise it might be creepy.
132711
i also write poems/songs. I felt it, so yes it is good.Whenever you can send someone inside themselves with your words ...make them feel. Then you have done something worthwhile. Keep writing hon.
714422
that poem was so sweet im crying now\n\nu would be a great poet u have got a good talent :) xx
510551
To be hoenst i think that line should come from you... and only you! Theres nothing worse than saying a line that has been heard before, or has been created from someone else! Think of something original and meaningful.\n\nThink about how you feel towards your gf, and how much you love and care for her. Dont feel any pressure in coming up with the "BEST" line possible...sometimes the simplest of lines, mean the most! \n\nhope this helps xx
700844
Very nice...you little romantic.......a poem or a song?\n\nYou wrote this....I love it!!!!!
253138
SURE-they're your poems.\ndon't restrict yourself with certain guidelines..\nGOOD LUCK WITH THE BOOK!!i write too!
157505
Its really not bad.  For only 13 you do show a lot of talent.  It shows both love and hardship.  I would give it a 7.5.  If you are planning on giving it to a girl though, I would try something on the more lighter side.  Girls like sappy.  Also, submit your poem to poetry.com.  Its free and you get a free copywrite for it.  Good job
418336
in my personal opinion its a good poem but i find poems are always better when the person has experienced what they are writing about whether or not its racism, abuse or love and you obviously have some skills as a poet but i think you could reach your full potential if you write about something you have been through